How to Write Your Essay for the Pearl N. Segerstrom Scholarship

Brainstorming Across the Four Buckets

Organize your thoughts by considering the four material buckets: Background, Achievements, The Gap, and Personality.

• Background: Identify significant experiences that shaped who you are today. Consider family influences, educational opportunities, or community involvement.
• Achievements: List your accomplishments, focusing on measurable outcomes. Include leadership roles, projects you've completed, or awards you've received.
• The Gap: Reflect on what you currently lack in your education or experience and how this scholarship will help bridge that gap. Be specific about your educational goals.
• Personality: Think about what makes you unique. Include personal anecdotes that reveal your values, interests, or motivations.

Creating an Outline

Once you have gathered your material, create an outline that logically organizes your thoughts. Aim for a structure that flows naturally from one section to the next, ensuring each paragraph serves a clear purpose.

1. Introduction: Start with a concrete moment or scene that captures the reader's attention and sets the stage for your narrative.
2. Body Paragraphs: Dedicate each paragraph to one of the four material buckets. Use the STAR framework to detail your achievements and experiences.
3. Conclusion: Reflect on how the scholarship will impact your future and reiterate your commitment to making a difference in your community.

Drafting Voice and Style

As you draft your essay, maintain an active voice and be specific in your language. Avoid clichés and ensure that every statement is supported by evidence or personal experience. Instead of saying you are passionate about a topic, show it through your actions and achievements.

Revision and the “So What?” Factor

After completing your draft, take a break before revising. Read your essay critically, asking yourself, “So what?” for each section. Ensure that your narrative reflects personal growth and insight, and that it clearly connects your past experiences to your future aspirations.

Common Pitfalls to Avoid

Be mindful of these common mistakes:

• Avoid vague statements that lack evidence.
• Steer clear of passive voice; always highlight your role in your achievements.
• Don’t include irrelevant information that doesn’t support your main narrative.
• Refrain from using overly complex language; clarity is key.